Monday, August 22, 2011
Impromptu Blog Contest - "SHOW" me what you got!
I know everyone and their dog has blogged/read/written articles about the topic of "Telling vs. Showing." But this one's different. It's for swag.
I was watching Frasier the other night (Best. Show. Ever. Outside of Dexter and South Park, anyway...) and I was tickled pink by one of his witty turns of phrase. Niles says something like, "I went to the gym to pump some iron and worked up quite a sweat." To which Frasier replies, "Pump iron? Niles, you don't even pump your own gas."
He could have just said, "I know you don't go to the gym; just look at those flimsy muscles!" But no; they went with something clever and almost ridiculous, and thereby made their point so much better. Delightful.
I'm a sucker for wit and irony anyway--probably why I enjoy that show so much--but it made me wonder, how else can we writers"show" rather than "tell," and elicit a chuckle?
I came up with a few examples (some inspired by Frasier and some not):
Telling: John was sad and poor.
Showing: On Christmas Eve, John got mugged walking home from the soup kitchen.
Telling: Mary loves pop culture.
Showing: Mary spent the night in jail after Tom Cruise caught her stealing his garbage for her “collection.”
Telling: Hank can be a sore loser.
Showing: Hank broke his son’s leg trying to win a three-legged-race at the church picnic.
Telling: My sister is talented.
Showing: My sister eats fire while riding a unicycle, playing the guitar one-handed, and singing “The Worst Pies in London” backwards.
Your turn! Come up with a bland & uninspired "telling" sentence, then rework it into a dazzling, mind-blowing, rib-tickling "showing" sentence and put them both in the comments section below this post by Friday, August 26th (oh, and, ya know...follow my blog :D). The wittiest comment (or comments) wins a free glass tile pendant of whatever the winner(s) want.
I have lots of inspirational writing gods/patrons, etc., which you can peruse at your leisure HERE, as well as HERE. I also have a smattering of retro/rockabilly-style zombies which haven't been set in glass yet but the templates are still pretty awesome. Or I can make it of anything else you want.
This was totally unplanned, and I have no set number of pendants that I'll give away. At least 1, of course, but perhaps as many as 5. I don't know. It all depends on how much you all delight me.